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What do you guys think of the story so far, and how it is presented? I need some feedback here.

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Well. After the Opening Day game, mom made me come back home and go back to school. I tried talking her into letting me stay in Detroit for the next game against the Tigers, but that was a big fat no. So I went home, and watched the guys get their first win against Detroit, and pull to .500. After two games though... We then went on to get swept by the Twins, in a big weekend series at Target Field. That was embarrassing. Still, my mom wouldn't let me go, because we had a family Easter to go to... it was horrible. We played a 4 game series against the Tigers then that week, and ended up doing fairly well, splitting the series. Our next weekend series was in Cleveland against The Tribe, so I wasn't going to that one. Then finally, on a random Thursday, the 17th, my mom said I could go watch the last game in the Twins series, at home in the Metrodome. We have lost the first 2 games already, and it'd really suck to be 0-6 against our in-state rivals. I had to be back to school by Friday though... My mom insists that I'm not going to spend all summer at a baseball park. She says I'll be lucky to go to 2 or 3 games each month. Which sucks, but at least she's paying for MLB TV, so I can watch all the games. Anyway, below is a summary of the games we've played since Opening Day.

4/4- L @ Twins, 6-14
4/5- L @ Twins, 8-9
4/6- L @Twins, 3-4

4/7- W vs. Tigers, 5-4
4/8- W vs. Tigers, 6-4
4/9- L vs. Tigers, 9-0
4/10- L vs. Tigers, 4-1

4/11- L @ Indians, 0-5
4/12- W @ Indians, 6-3
4/13- L @ Indians, 1-3

4/15- L vs. Twins, 0-2
4/16- L vs. Twins, 2-6

Overall Record: 4-10

It's good writing, but the plot is nearly the same as Dish's

Yeah, I know, I didn't really want to make this too much about story though. I didn't think I'd be writing this much.

Should I just stop the story, and just do games?

If you don't like doing the writing, then just focus on the games. But there might also be other opinions

I like doing story now, I just don't wanna rip off dish.

Also, I'm busy most of this weekend, so this might not be updated again until Sunday night or Monday night.

Hmm, kill yourself off in a terrible shooting, and pass on the team to your 27 year old third cousin, twice removed

Hey, man, you can totally rip me off if you want. I wouldn't mind.

Go all rebel mode and leave for Rochester on your own.